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Oh look at her with ivory eyes,
Striking the velvet veil of starless skies.
Is she a draconian demon ready to bring ruin,
Upon those that ripped her life apart,
With every pulsating beat of her black-heart?

Oh look at her with crimson claws,
Maiming the satin skin of monstrous maws.
Is she a bedlam beast desiring to grant devastation,
Upon those who mocked her for a start,
With all the wild begging of her black-heart?

Oh look at her with ebony breath,
Purging the flaxen flesh of devilish death.
Is she a cruel creature who wields her earthly wrath
Upon all who took to hurt with such art,
With the aching echoes of her black-heart?
Wrote this a few minutes ago on a whim.

Read it back to myself and it seems to me as though it's about a young girl who's getting revenge on all the people who bullied her. Or a case of a shy girl finding her assertive nature coming to the fore. Either way works for my interpretation.
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This latest work is also very unique, I have to say. You have the idea to divide the rhyme of septets with a single interception of a non-rhyming line. The Romantics like Shelley and Byron, my most fave poets of that term, would be busy with this. I enjoy this style too, when I have the mood. The subject content is also interesting, and the expression. To look at someone with eyes of ivory rather than with rose colored spects is a unique idea too. I have the feeling that the repetition of some lines is emphatic here. You can correct me if I am wrong. Well-done, as usual. Take a bow downstage.
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kartiksharma Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2012  Student General Artist
AMazing Job!♥
Manigran Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Powerful work.
Concora Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2012   Writer
Excellent imagery, and wonderful characterisation for such a fleeting piece.
Jay-Scrawl Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2012
AH! The whim - muse set afire! I love it! Aside from the rhyme scheme which is great, I liked the repetitive nature of the 1st, 3rd, 4th, and 5th lines and the 2nd lines starting with: Striking - Maiming - Purging !! Excellent play!
My interpretation is the Black Heart is Mother Earth - and she will, because of us, have her revenge. She will strike and maim and purge the Earth of Man (most of us - re-start the cycle!).
TheOneFallenAngel Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You Know, A Black-Heart Doesn't Make You A Bad Person. :(
ilove-sky Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I love it! And thank you for putting an interpretation, it gives an even fuller body to this already very full poem.
NemoX7 Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2012   Writer
Thanks. Sometimes I can't really think of what to put in that damn description box. I gave two interpretations since I believed it warranted as such. I wrote this without thinking to be honest, and when I looked back at it again a second before uploading, I thought of what the poem was about. I would say it's theme is about revenge.
ilove-sky Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Too much thought can really draw from the creativity, I love that you just write.
NemoX7 Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2012   Writer
Always have and always will. But I do at times put some thought into my work especially my poetry trilogies, my novel, and other longish poems.
ilove-sky Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Yeah, I get that, same here.
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