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Dear Mr. Reality,
What have you done to me?
I am alone and everyone has died,
Was it more than words of weary woe,
Or silence that made them leave?

Dear Mr. Reality,
Where are you right now?
I am scared and everything has gone,
Was it only little things in turbulent times,
Or a catastrophe I did not know?

Dear Mr. Reality,
Why couldn't you just be dead?
I am upset and everywhere has vanished,
Was it just me screwing up social salutations,
Or mere fantasy of realism instead?
Inspired in partiality by Dear Mr. Fantasy by Traffic.

This may be my last poem for a while. Well, depending if I get computer access at the library and the ability to upload what I write. (I have to copy by hand what I write onto the library computer, since they don't have the necessary computer word processing program that I use.)
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Onovika Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
Very good. I like the tone and how it talks, and the dramatic emotion. Very good. :D
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ScarletFlowerXXX Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I love this!
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NemoX7 Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Ah thanks, why do you love it?
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ScarletFlowerXXX Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
It's deep and almost haunting. At least that's my opinion :d
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WimpyBookworm101 Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I like the idea you have behind it. Very interesting word choices and detailed to the point that it doesn't need anymore explaining than what is written here already. The emotions your words evict are plainly stated, something the reader can instantly pick up....as I said, very interesting (and great! i might add) word choice. :)
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silvergabetha834 Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2012  Professional General Artist
I really like this. The voice is sophisticated yet naive. The structure is awesome, each line with a relationship both to the lines above and below but also to the corresponding line in the stanza above or below it. I very much enjoyed it.


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NemoX7 Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks. Glad you enjoyed the technique I implemented in my poem. Much appreciated.
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Tartansweet Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Innocent and superb, love it!
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NemoX7 Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks.
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Tartansweet Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
No problem. :D
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