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Sometimes when I close my eyes,
I dream of a calmer time when I didn't cry.
To slumber alone in those sunshine days,
Where I was at peace: away from the craze,
Yet I fear I'm wondering lost in their urban plague.

Sometimes when I close my eyes,
I escape to a darker place where I can die.
To linger awhile in that luminous night,
Where I can be content: caught in the daze,
Yet I know I'm struggling now in this hopeless phase.

Sometimes when I close my eyes,
I think of a serene dawn while I sigh.
To vacate away in that voidless space,
Where I shall be alive: independent of that maze,
Yet I wake I'm choking air in that distant place.

But I'm just silently screaming!
From all this dismal dreaming,
When all my tears are sorrowfully streaming!
From my horrid heart that's bleeding,
Can't you see how hard I'm pleading!
Inspired by my frustration at wanting to go back to my past and living in peace instead of having to deal with life's stress at the moment. But I think all people sometimes wish this at times.
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TheAnimalsRight Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Enjoyed reading very much
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NemoX7 Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013   Writer
Thanks, I'm glad you enjoyed reading this. Why not take the opportunity to have a read through some of my latest work if you have the time.
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Laralluna Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012  Student Writer
Yes, poetry is the answer when all else fails... good heartfelt write. :rose:
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ohio-writer Featured By Owner May 17, 2012  Student Writer
The powerful ending, more an ellipsis than a period, is the true feeling of the voice. I really enjoyed the dip into the void, but I do certainly hope you are not drowning in it. On paper now we see the frustrations of the voice, and in it, we share greatly our souls with it. I hope our comments reach well sir.
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kartiksharma Featured By Owner May 17, 2012  Student General Artist
Very neat!
I really like it!
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Vegetabelle Featured By Owner May 16, 2012  Student General Artist
:tight hug: been there, kid. You'll make it. You're strong enough.
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LarutanFirefly Featured By Owner May 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:huggle: This poem is brilliant.
I guess everybody looks back and wishes things were easier like they used to be. I feel your frustration, even if it's not in the same way.
Also, I love the rhyming, it works well.
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lintu47 Featured By Owner May 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Hello, you have been featured in my weekly dA love for everyone! article.
Have a nice day :huggle:
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KelaLewis-Morin Featured By Owner May 15, 2012  Student Writer
I like nice use of rhyme and the regular structure. The ending rhyming quatret really gives it a climatic ending well done :)
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Manigran Featured By Owner May 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
So sad and powerful, but beautiful. That's what I love about this poem.
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CrystalTearz55 Featured By Owner May 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautifully written
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SonicAngel15 Featured By Owner May 14, 2012  Student General Artist
Dude, as a girl with Asperger's syndrome, I feel the same way.

There were times when I wish I could just go back to my childhood instead of having to deal with the responsibilities that come with being a high school Junior (in the United States, where our educational system is crappier than that of the United Kingdom, the rest of Europe, and Far East Asia).
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NemoX7 Featured By Owner May 14, 2012   Writer
Even without Asperger's syndrome, I fail to see the point of responsibility (especially when it's the stress of trying to pay bills with nonexistent money) that shuffles it's way to my door each day. Only time I want to go back to is since I first moved to Edinburgh, two months after I turned 20.

Don't worry I think the education system is a sham here in the UK, although Scotland's and England's educational consensus are run separately. Can't say much about how the US version is run, but from the looks of it, doesn't seem to be great.
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