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They say hate can kill,
But maybe love can as well?
If you were so enthralled with lust,
Would you hurt those,
Who turned your heart to dust?

They say hate does you no good,
But perhaps love never really could?
If you were touched by happiness,
Would you defend those,
Who showed you heaven no less?

They say hate will die,
But surely they know love can lie?
If you were haunted by fear,
Would you seek those,
Who helped you each and every year?
A quick poem I wrote before getting something to eat. Still can't believe that I have now 452 poems in my gallery. Hope people like this, or at least get some enjoyment, no matter how small from it.
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Your personal style really stands out in this one. The frequent questions, along with the unique rhyme scheme, gives it sort of a signature. Your message is very apparent, and the title adds all the more purpose to the piece. Marvelous job with this one.

Breakdown of ratings:

4 for Vision. Like with most of your poetry, the lines are clear and organized. I didn't lose myself with too many words to stumble over.

4 1/2 for Originality. The first two lines caught my attention; it's not often that love is treated so abrasively. I really enjoyed the twist of ideas in this.

4 for Technique. Again, I must commend your rhyme and rhythm. In this one, the patter -- A, A, B, C, B -- was very tasteful and pleasant to the ear.

5 for Impact. Great message with a good delivery. I felt the message and emotion of the piece distinctly.

Another overall excellent work. I enjoy your style immensely, and look forward to seeing more good poetry from you.
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A7XFan666 Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2012
Awesome:D
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Vegetabelle Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2012  Student General Artist
Questions! I love it! Question peoms make you think more! Brillianly writen.
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NemoX7 Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah, I like question poems too. Gives the mind a chance to really think. I think I've written a few like this... Glad you liked it.
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CaXe Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I like it a lot, very true words. Good job. :)
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NemoX7 Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Your welcome and I'm glad the words were true for you.
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