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This is meant to be like this. So please don't say to me that it needs more. I wrote this as a quick-fire poem that is meant to be a one off.
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:star::star::star::star: Overall
:star::star::star::star-half::star-empty: Vision
:star::star::star::star::star: Originality
:star::star::star::star::star-empty: Technique
:star::star::star::star::star: Impact

Your poem challenges a lot of ideals set forth by society. For example, the population of this world generally deems it sick and twisted to laugh at something that is considered morbid. I like that you mentioned this idea in your fourth line of your first stanza. The entire poem seems to embody this one phrase as it practically satires the society we all reside in.
Your poem also hold a very true example of integrity in ones character. Your piece brings about a strong sense of inner fortitude and makes your audience believe that no matter what may come, you WILL always stand true to yourself and your ideals.
Overall, your piece was very well worded and structured strongly. It did not have giant wholes where the rhythm fell through and it was not overly repetitive at all. It seemed very stream of consciousness; As if you stated one idea and then moved to the next. It added a very carefree and reluctant voice to the poem. As your speaker delved into his own thoughts in the second stanza, I actually felt myself sympathizing with them. You managed to sound very human in this. Good job and always keep writing.