I find this work rather amazing, it gives you sort of a strange dark feeling to it and as every poet or writer has their own style yours is very interesting. Not only did it pull me in, but the words weren't direct, so plenty of people can interpret it in many ways. Now here comes the critizism.

As much as I enjoyed it, I felt that it ended far too quickly, as if the poem is unfinished. Your last line doesn't exactly tie it all together. I'm not saying it's horrible, but you should go back and work on it more.

Actually other then that, nothing bothered me xD but that's only my opinion, there is always room to improve and remember that. It's our journey as a writer to learn off of others or even ourselves, and strive to become better.

Keep up the good work ^^