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:star::star::star::star: Overall
:star::star::star::star::star-empty: Vision
:star::star::star::star::star-empty: Originality
:star::star::star::star-half::star-empty: Technique
:star::star::star::star::star: Impact

I love the "feel" of these stanzas. The questions grow more and more demanding with each line, which gives each one more force than the last. A very potent message; written very well.

Breakdown of my ratings:

4 for Vision. (Let's pretend it stays "Structure.") The rhythm is steady throughout, with a recognizable phrasing with each stanza.

4 for Originality. The theme itself is unique, as well as the imploring tone of the poem.

3 1/2 for Technique. The repeated lines add a nice touch, and defines the whole idea quite nicely. However, I couldn't really recognize a steady rhyming pattern throughout. (But this is excusable since it's free-verse of course!)

5 for Impact. With these elements combined, the poem was very clear in meaning and delivered well.

Thank you for allowing me to review your poem. Overall, a short thought-provoking work that I rather enjoyed.