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To say goodbye,
It's not the hardest word.
My honesty is all but broken,
And I look away with eyes so blue,
I cannot say with these tears I cry.

To say sorry,
It's not the hardest word.
My ignorance only leaves you shattered,
And I know in my heart so black,
I should apologise but I'd rather fly.

To say no,
It's not the hardest word.
My addiction drives you insane,
And I feel that my ears bleed so red,
As I struggle to answer your one question: why?
Wrote this last week, haven't had the time of late to write much or submit anything.
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Good rhyme pattern,I have seen so many that used rhymed couplets like children's nursery stuff and I have critiqued only a few. You and I share a skill at blank or slant rhyme. Glad to see that.
About the scheme, it was definitely original and well-constructed. Your tone is rather sarcastic though, especially when you stipulate that you would prefer to leave rather than to surrender; but who knows? Maybe many people are that way nowadays?
You did one more thing that i liked: you looked at the three words that may really be hard to say. I often hear that Sorry seems so hard to say. Very interesting material. Congratulations and thank you for writing a change.
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SaphiqueX13 Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This certainly caught my eye, it's very original :) It has excellent flow and has great emotion. I really love it.
tamiea Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Nice . Very sad too
Vegetabelle Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2012  Student General Artist
I absolutely love this. This is probably the best thing you've written in a few days. The rhyme and rhythm don't sound forced at all, and the overall syntax is just great! ^_^ Great topic. It really feels like your pulling from experience, and real emotion here. It feels like your showing us yourself.
haakon95 Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
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