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She's a siren of the airwaves,
And I love it when she misbehaves.
Burning air I lust after her elegance,
Breathing in all her melodies lasciviously,
Pursuing her blindly over currents of crimson chance.

But every single time she cries my name,
I don't know if to her it's all just a game.
Weeping tears only for me,
Wailing along the air seductively,
Drowning me softly in glades with gruesome glee.

She's a siren turning me into ash,
Yet her love like tempestuous waves crash.
Sitting down next to me,
Singing down my ear promiscuously,
Killing me gently upon shores of sombre seas.
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I based this on a spark of inspiration about the mariner's myth about sirens. You know the beautiful mermaid sitting on a rock who sings to passing merchant or pirate ships before sending them to their deaths.

In my own view this is about a guy who hears a beautiful feminine voice singing on the radio and he falls in love with her. Tracking her down she thens kills the poor soul.
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~Ozuchi-Kozuchi Jul 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I like it. The theme is carried throughout and wrapped up nicely. Your rhyme scheme seems a little forced in places, especially the second stanza, though the last one is awesome. :)
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~Synnic Jul 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I really love your opening stanza, but you seem to lose the rhythm afterwards to awkward turns of phrase. It feels like you started fishing to fit the rhyme scheme you had chosen.
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*shehrozeameen Jul 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:clap: reminds me more of the Odyssey - Odysseus being dragged onto the island and kept there till his bargain was made.
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~Vegetabelle Jul 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is really beautiful! I love sirens.
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Mood: Love ~bandnerd5 Jul 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
i have to agree. that was quite beautiful. so very emotional. i was sucked in after the third line
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*MistressofQuills Jul 14, 2012  Student Writer
i really like your rhymes:)
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~JokerrLaughs Jul 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
so beautifully written
and quite a good usage of imagery
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