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Took me nearly 2 hours to write this. This must be one of my longest poems ever written by me that is not in multiple parts. I really wanted to try and write a ghost poem with a twist and I believe I succeeded in my attempt. There's quite a lot that goes on in the narrative. It's a bit like having a poem within a poem at times especially when the stranger is speaking.

This actually started off a simple rhyming past-time for a bit of fun to pass the time away. I could have written this is a free-verse poem, but I felt it suited being a more traditional fixed form poem instead.
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LauraS45 Featured By Owner 1 day ago
This is a magnificent poem. I love your use of imagery, it just captures you into the poem in a haunting way that makes you feel the story, like the emotions put into it. Lovely job.:)
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TinaLouiseUk Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
wow...what an epic read! A chilling tale, such vivid imagery. Thoroughly enjoyed :) x
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NemoX7 Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed this complex endeavour as much I spent writing it. :) x
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TinaLouiseUk Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I usually get put off when a read is too long, however it grips from the get go so was an easy read :) x
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Nicole-Nyx Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2013
Well, congratulations on the Daily Deviation. It is truly reminiscent of traditional folklore with a very personalised edge to it, especially in regards to the rhyme scheme and of course, the elevated descriptions. At first impression, I though that it would be something along the lines of "Stopping by Woods on a Snowy Evening" by Robert Frost. Of course, I was wrong...I have come to interpret the female character as something along the lines of a succubus?

For a fairly straightforward story line, it does have a great deal of complexity and sophistication, as is typical of your work. The diction and imagery are simply fabulous. Is literature, by any chance, part of your profession?
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BlueRibbonRedneck Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
First of all I've gotta say wow! No wonder you got a DD on this buddy. You are seriously a poetry prophet! Like I've told you before, the imagery you use in your poems are seriously mind-blowing. As I was reading this, I could basically see a movie of this rolling in my head. It's almost like I was there!! You know, you could seriously write a book and it would be a best-seller!
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NemoX7 Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Yep, that's exactly how I see it as a movie. Some parts do get vague in a few poems, 
but with this it was all vivid and pitch perfect in my mind. I keep thinking about writing 
a book. I probably will since I have a few ideas of what I want to write. Still I want to 
make sure I'm not writing up a plot that is too cliched and plus such a venture means
I need to find a sense of peace before I can commit to it. And thank you. The DD meant
a lot to me, still look at it like it's unreal.
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BlueRibbonRedneck Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I know how you feel, I've been trying to write a book for eternity but I always seem to get into roadblocks but you have an amazing gift in writing and I hope you pursue that!
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CatGal15 Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Very beautiful and sad. I think you are the best poet of 2013.
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NemoX7 Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh why thank you. Best poet? I'm honoured, though I still got another two months until 2013 ends. You definitely sure you'd say the same once 2014 kicks in?
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