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Took me nearly 2 hours to write this. This must be one of my longest poems ever written by me that is not in multiple parts. I really wanted to try and write a ghost poem with a twist and I believe I succeeded in my attempt. There's quite a lot that goes on in the narrative. It's a bit like having a poem within a poem at times especially when the stranger is speaking.

This actually started off a simple rhyming past-time for a bit of fun to pass the time away. I could have written this is a free-verse poem, but I felt it suited being a more traditional fixed form poem instead.
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Daily Deviation

Given 2013-10-30
Tessriane Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Holy cow!
LauraS45 Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2014
This is a magnificent poem. I love your use of imagery, it just captures you into the poem in a haunting way that makes you feel the story, like the emotions put into it. Lovely job.:)
TinaLouiseUk Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
wow...what an epic read! A chilling tale, such vivid imagery. Thoroughly enjoyed :) x
NemoX7 Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2014   Writer
Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed this complex endeavour as much I spent writing it. :) x
TinaLouiseUk Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I usually get put off when a read is too long, however it grips from the get go so was an easy read :) x
Nicole-Nyx Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2013
Well, congratulations on the Daily Deviation. It is truly reminiscent of traditional folklore with a very personalised edge to it, especially in regards to the rhyme scheme and of course, the elevated descriptions. At first impression, I though that it would be something along the lines of "Stopping by Woods on a Snowy Evening" by Robert Frost. Of course, I was wrong...I have come to interpret the female character as something along the lines of a succubus?

For a fairly straightforward story line, it does have a great deal of complexity and sophistication, as is typical of your work. The diction and imagery are simply fabulous. Is literature, by any chance, part of your profession?
BlueRibbonRedneck Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
First of all I've gotta say wow! No wonder you got a DD on this buddy. You are seriously a poetry prophet! Like I've told you before, the imagery you use in your poems are seriously mind-blowing. As I was reading this, I could basically see a movie of this rolling in my head. It's almost like I was there!! You know, you could seriously write a book and it would be a best-seller!
NemoX7 Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2013   Writer
Yep, that's exactly how I see it as a movie. Some parts do get vague in a few poems, 
but with this it was all vivid and pitch perfect in my mind. I keep thinking about writing 
a book. I probably will since I have a few ideas of what I want to write. Still I want to 
make sure I'm not writing up a plot that is too cliched and plus such a venture means
I need to find a sense of peace before I can commit to it. And thank you. The DD meant
a lot to me, still look at it like it's unreal.
BlueRibbonRedneck Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I know how you feel, I've been trying to write a book for eternity but I always seem to get into roadblocks but you have an amazing gift in writing and I hope you pursue that!
CatGal15 Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Very beautiful and sad. I think you are the best poet of 2013.
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